tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4843833519373801339.post3869573760384919422..comments2020-08-22T09:23:05.149-07:00Comments on Ruminations of a Remembrancer: The Man Who Found Birds among the Stars, Ch. 2Lorinda J Taylorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16985567506994751475noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4843833519373801339.post-18936633121080973312012-10-23T10:41:45.847-07:002012-10-23T10:41:45.847-07:00Thanks so much! As I said in the comment above, I&...Thanks so much! As I said in the comment above, I've always liked this chapter. It is a WIP so I'll keep any criticisms in mind.Lorinda J Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16985567506994751475noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4843833519373801339.post-46101714785048297872012-10-23T10:33:26.476-07:002012-10-23T10:33:26.476-07:00Good read Lorinda. The first couple of paragraphs ...Good read Lorinda. The first couple of paragraphs were a little clinical but you soon switched to a story telling mode which was more colourful. Enjoyed it.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01055538134657843992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4843833519373801339.post-15179899428312147902012-10-14T13:37:04.847-07:002012-10-14T13:37:04.847-07:00Darn - the comments don't seem to pick up acti...Darn - the comments don't seem to pick up active URLs. But you can paste it in or just look for Man Who Found Birds among the Stars in the Labels. Lorinda J Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16985567506994751475noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4843833519373801339.post-4249701705786406762012-10-14T13:34:28.434-07:002012-10-14T13:34:28.434-07:00Wonderful! I've always liked this chapter. D...Wonderful! I've always liked this chapter. Did you read Chapter 1? This should take you to it: http://termitewriter.blogspot.com/2012/09/relief-from-serious-tone-of-last-few.html <br />I'm using a flashback technique, and I'm not fond of Chapter 1 as an opening chapter. Too much telling and not showing, especially when we get to Wilda's conversation with Ravi. But how else are you going to summarize briefly the Captain's current situation?Lorinda J Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16985567506994751475noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4843833519373801339.post-28283097814369865262012-10-14T12:35:20.946-07:002012-10-14T12:35:20.946-07:00Manual sounds like a nasty piece of work; I'm ...Manual sounds like a nasty piece of work; I'm glad they left him. What a beautiful description you've given of Sterling, she sounds so elegant! Your writing is very evocative, Lorinda, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.Catherine Noblehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04779799397032396279noreply@blogger.com