I'm still having the same reaction to the chemo (see my last two blog posts), but I decided to forget about it for now and write on a more entertaining topic.
I just read this article about the use of body language in fiction. http://imogenbellwriting.com/2015/01/14/body-language-in-fiction and it has prompted me to write a post about how I use body language in my writing. I'll give examples.
From v.1: The Speaking of the Dead
Chapter 8 (using body language to change another's opinion of a character):
“You impressed Prf. Jerardo at
the Yakuta symposium. He says you debate
with a real instinct for the kill.”
Kaitrin looked at Jerardo in
surprise; he was grinning and rocking on his heels. So he really had noticed that she had
trounced him! Maybe she had been selling
him short.
Chapter 7 (Kaitrin observes the enigmatic but disturbingly attractive Griffen Gwidian in a social setting for the first time. We learn a lot about Griffen's reputation for womanizing from how he and the other woman interact, and we learn something about Kaitrin from how she reacts.)
Kaitrin stared at the distant
table. Gwidian was not alone; his
companion was someone Kaitrin had seen in the XA Database Lab – an
exotic-looking, dusky-skinned woman with hair dressed in the currently trendy lion’s-mane
style, frizzed out in points tipped with colors, in this case a mix of silver
and blue.
“What is the matter? Your mouth is open.”
Kaitrin closed it. “He’s with somebody. How did he get to know that person so
quickly? He’s been over here to anthro
only a couple of times.”
“I have to look – just a peek … Oh, I know that woman! Her name is Meka – do not know the second
name. And they think I am strange-looking. But she, too, has a reputation.”
Kaitrin was having trouble
taking her eyes off the pair. Gwidian
was laughing, leaning intimately toward his companion, who bent closer in
response. She knuckled him playfully on
the forearm, inclining her head sideways.
He raised his right hand, slipped it around the back of the woman’s neck
in a seemingly practiced gesture and ran his fingers up into her hair. Her head bent a little farther forward with
the pressure.
Then Gwidian’s glance shifted
and he saw Kaitrin looking at him. For a
moment their gazes cleaved together as if no one else were present in the
crowded dining room. Then his hand
dropped back to rest on the table, his glance slid away, and Kaitrin lowered
her own eyes in confusion.
“What now?” asked Luku. “You have that where the blood goes to the
face.”
“He saw me looking. He has the most intense eyes. Damn.
Let’s finish up here and get back to the lab.”
Chapter 11 (The first spontaneous "date" between Kaitrin and Griffen is going swimmingly, until one of his old flames shows up. Another example of how to suggest character through body language and how to merge into suggestive or sarcastic dialogue. This and the previous example also show how you can use clothing to delineate character.)
“Griff! Imagine running into you over here!”
Gwidian’s face gathered into a
frown. Kaitrin looked up to see a
dark-haired woman standing at his elbow, glancing between them. She was clad in a low-cut yellow leotard and
black mesh tights.
“Margit,” said Gwidian, looking sideways at
her. “It’s been a while.”
“It certainly has. Have you lost my relay code, Griff?”
Kaitrin sat frozen, staring at
this interloper with the amused black eyes and suggestive smile.
“I’ve been off-world,” Gwidian
said. His voice was tight. “Asc. Oliva, this is Margit Terrie. Margit, Asc. Kaitrin Oliva, a colleague in my
latest project.”
Margit cocked her head at
Kaitrin, swaying her hips slightly. “A
colleague! How special! Too bad you can’t use a dance instructor in
your projects, Griff! Your latest one
requires a visit to the Arts campus, does it?”
“Asc. Oliva and I were about
to view the faculty art show.”
“I didn’t know you were so
interested in art,” said Margit. “You
never told me that, Griff.” She gave him
no time to answer. “Message me some
time. I never went away.”
“If I can,” replied Gwidian
coldly. “I’m going off-world again.”
“Again? Too bad!
And, Asc. Oliva, you’ll be going off-world with him?”
Kaitrin was never sure
afterward how she had replied.
“Well, I’m so happy I ran into
you, Griff. Asc. Oliva, nice to meet
you. Good luck on your expedition! See you later?” With a little flurry of hip and shoulder, she
was gone.
There was a glacial
silence. All the rapport, all the
warmth, had departed with Margit Terrie.
Then Gwidian muttered
something unintelligible and pushed back his plate. “Perhaps I should be returning to my
office. I seem to recall a matter that
requires attention.”
“What? And miss out on nurturing this unprecedented
interest in art?” said Kaitrin acidly.
He puffed his cheeks, gestured impatiently,
and stood up. “You’ll enjoy the exhibit
a good deal more without me, I’m sure.
I’ll possibly see you before the committee meeting."
Not if I can help it, went through Kaitrin’s mind. How
could I possibly have let down my guard this way with this – this promiscuous
stud?
Gwidian had turned back. His expression of distress appeared
genuine. “Kaitrin, I feel I owe you an
explanation … ”
Kaitrin was not buying
it. “What for? Your recreational activities are of no
concern to me. And my name is Asc.
Oliva.”
Gwidian hesitated, then threw
up his hands and walked away swiftly toward the door.
I'm discovering that hardly a chapter goes by without using body language in my writing, and so I think I'll just stop there. Doesn't every writer use body language? Anybody who doesn't had better figure it out.
A good example of body language at the moment Ki'shto'ba and Kwi'ga'ga'tei receive the Speaking of the Dead. |
From The Termite Queen, v.2: The Wound That Has No Healing
Chapter 21 (Kaitrin is engaged in telling the Queen A'kha'ma'na'ta and her "court" the tale of Ulysses and the Cyclops)
“The Zin’tei woke up and commenced making
such a commotion that it could be sensed all the way through the stone over the
door. Friends who lived in other caves
nearby came running to see what was happening.
They asked him, ‘What is the matter in there? Is somebody harming you? Who is it?’
“But, of course, here is what the Zin’tei
answered: ‘It is Nobody’s work that is
doing this to me! Nobody is doing me harm!’”
As this sank in, Kaitrin experienced a
very strange phenomenon. The Shshi
commenced to bounce themselves up and down with little springs of their
forelegs, spinning their antennae in wild circles so that any words they were
transmitting were broadcast unintelligibly in all directions. They swung their heads in U-shaped
motions. Even Kwi’ga’ga’tei participated
in this exercise, and the Commander Hi’ta’fu was somewhat ponderously caught
up. Mo’gri’ta’tu, however, only gave a
couple of tiny hops and held his antennae motionless.
Clever! said Di’fa’kro’mi. Most entertaining!
‘Nobody’ did it to me – That is quite humorous! said Ki’shto’ba, using a word Kaitrin
had never encountered before, but whose meaning seemed clear from the context.
It was a revelation. This
must be how they laugh! The Shshi have a
sense of humor! I never would have
thought it! What a gift to discover
this!
From The Labors of Ki'shto'ba Huge-Head.
Vol. 1: The War of the Stolen Mother, Chapter 1 (Di'fa'kro'mi is droning on about how he invented writing in an image language and his scribe Chi'mo'a'tu gets bored. Handling body language in a first-person narrative is a little different, because it has to be completely relevant to what the narrator is thinking and feeling.)
What? Why are
you stamping about and flaring your wings?
I am well aware that you know all this already! I suppose I am boring you! But I am not finished analyzing my thought
processes. A Remembrancer should always
finish what he has begun to tell – that is a cardinal rule! That is the trouble these days – you young
ones are in too much of a hurry, impatient to be finished. You have never learned how to pay attention,
and words do not have the fascination for you that they should.
Please do not display
such indignation, Chi’mo’a’tu – I am well aware that you know how to pay
attention. Would I have chosen you as my
principal
scribe for this undertaking if I had
thought you could not pay attention?
Vol. 4: Beneath the Mountain of Heavy Fear, Chapter 18 (The Companions are visiting the southern fortress of Ra'ki'wiv'u and the fortress's Remembrancer is telling the tale of the Great Bird Hunt [think of The Hunt for the Calydonian Boar]):
Huffing, we all relaxed back into
our seating places. It was a rousing
tale and Fi’frum’zei’s animated delivery had enhanced the excitement. She had hopped around the room, flapping her
antennae so wildly that at times her words became unintelligible. When someone in the tale hurled a spear, she
hurled a mock one, and when Thel’tav’a shot her dart, she mimicked that
motion. When Ist’u’mim’zei fell into the
hole, she pretended to trip over her own feet and thrashed around on the floor. A mandible-slash demanded a vigorous shaking
of the head. I had never seen a tale
told in quite that fashion – physically imitating the action. It was quite effective but not very
dignified! I wondered if all the
Remembrancers in these parts told tales that way, or if it was an effect of the
trol’zhuf’zi| [a fermented leaf]! If the former were true, I doubted my static
delivery style would provide any chance of winning a prize at the upcoming
competition.
I hope some of you will have found these examples enjoyable. If you want to read more, check out the covers in the sidebar or go to Amazon, Barnes & Noble, or Smashwords. I'm still trying to get somebody to buy a book at Smashwords. I only need 10 cents to qualify for a royalty payment.
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